Describing a dance floor can take 1,200 words
I am now up to 2,629. I'm pacing myself, unlike some of you motherf**rs. Today, I discovered that describing a dance floor can take 1,200 words. I didn't make much progress with the story, but I did get to introduce Laura, and Seth is about to see the Duchess and Crystal Mayle (aka King Lightning) perform. This will be the catalyst for whatever passes as plot in this sorry excuse for a novel!
High points of today's writing included Seth being confused by the proliferation of bathrooms, and discovering the impressive ballroom, of Jackie's Place. Did you know that mirror balls (aka disco balls) were invented in the 1920's? Yep, just in time for my novel.
Becuase nothing much happened, I can't give you an excerpt that advances the plot in any way. So instead, I give you this little piece that amused me. I hope it doesn't enrage any of you. I know how Esmondes can fly off the handle (a la Reggie) when they are crossed.
As she entered the ballroom, she stepped out of the way of those behind her to examine the grand space. Directly in front of her was a large wooden dance floor, occupied by a number of couples swirling to the slow, syncopated tune. Above the dance floor, a glittering mirror ball cast an iridescent glow over everyone. Directly in front of Seth, a man and a woman were staring into one anothers’ eyes, barely moving to the music. The girl was not very pretty, and seemed a little clumsy, and was probably annoyingly self-deprecating. The man was handsome as a Greek God, with alluring golden eyes. As the light from the mirror ball hit his exposed skin, Seth swore his arm was glittering. She tore her eyes from this strange couple and moved past them to get a better view of the rest of the room. As she passed, the man placed a protective arm around his paramour, and glared fiercely at Seth. She brushed against him and was surprised to feel his skin was cold as night and hard as steel. Seth hurried on, anxious to get away from the pair.
High points of today's writing included Seth being confused by the proliferation of bathrooms, and discovering the impressive ballroom, of Jackie's Place. Did you know that mirror balls (aka disco balls) were invented in the 1920's? Yep, just in time for my novel.
Becuase nothing much happened, I can't give you an excerpt that advances the plot in any way. So instead, I give you this little piece that amused me. I hope it doesn't enrage any of you. I know how Esmondes can fly off the handle (a la Reggie) when they are crossed.
As she entered the ballroom, she stepped out of the way of those behind her to examine the grand space. Directly in front of her was a large wooden dance floor, occupied by a number of couples swirling to the slow, syncopated tune. Above the dance floor, a glittering mirror ball cast an iridescent glow over everyone. Directly in front of Seth, a man and a woman were staring into one anothers’ eyes, barely moving to the music. The girl was not very pretty, and seemed a little clumsy, and was probably annoyingly self-deprecating. The man was handsome as a Greek God, with alluring golden eyes. As the light from the mirror ball hit his exposed skin, Seth swore his arm was glittering. She tore her eyes from this strange couple and moved past them to get a better view of the rest of the room. As she passed, the man placed a protective arm around his paramour, and glared fiercely at Seth. She brushed against him and was surprised to feel his skin was cold as night and hard as steel. Seth hurried on, anxious to get away from the pair.
LOVING the introduction of SM's characters. That was so hilarious. I'm glad that "Seth hurried on, anxious to get away from the pair." That's what any smart person would do. Do you think that SM was there and was inspired by this couple?
ReplyDeleteI also enjoyed the second use of iridescent.
Hilarious... I love the description of the female in the couple, it was much better than any that appeared in SM's books. Poor Seth, little did she know that Edward was reading her thoughts!
ReplyDeleteI am glad Seth moved on from that couple. Watching them for too long and one is liable to vomit. Although that may have advanced the plot in a interesting way ;P
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